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I used Sanami's Textures #61 as a background paper for this poetry
fav.me/dx5d8b the textures are the artists and all rights belong to them
L_I_S_T_S
© Amanda 2014
All rights to copy, transfer, use in any form, including electronic, digital, aural, visual are reserved by the Author, Blonde On Horse Publishing, their designees, or rights holders. No rights are transferred to the reader to edit, alter, extract, or derive from this work in any form unless explicitly agreed upon. All references made to the work, or quotes from the work must be fully, clearly and accurately cited.
fav.me/dx5d8b the textures are the artists and all rights belong to them
L_I_S_T_S
© Amanda 2014
All rights to copy, transfer, use in any form, including electronic, digital, aural, visual are reserved by the Author, Blonde On Horse Publishing, their designees, or rights holders. No rights are transferred to the reader to edit, alter, extract, or derive from this work in any form unless explicitly agreed upon. All references made to the work, or quotes from the work must be fully, clearly and accurately cited.
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Overall Vision Originality Technique Impact<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/c/c…" width="20" height="20" alt="
" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="60" title="Clap"/> I haven't written a critique in quite a long time, and this one deserved it.The use of the list in this work was perfect! Honestly, its a tale of the protagonist's life right before me, with a cyclic portrayal of how one would proceed from a beginning with no ending. Each work has a story all its own - subtle yet straightforward. Honestly, a job well done <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="
" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>My personal favorite point in the L_I_S_T itself, was "unmade friends and empty slippers beside the door". To me, it speaks of an imaginary allusion to people we would love to have as friends, but do not exist anymore with the passage of time... as if life's moved on, and the past is not going to come back anymore except as a haunting reminder of good times long past... and in the end, questioning whether they were good times to begin with. Bravo! Truly!
Your poem is very well written honestly - Puzzled captured my POV to perfection, and this critique is just me reaffirming that this is a wonderful work!